首先說下表達方面,受中式寫作的影響,,我們可能很喜歡在寫作上充分表達自己的“思想深度”,,實際上,規(guī)定式作文的拓展空間本來就非常有限,所以只要把作文按命題要求表達順暢是關鍵,。
表達方面可能還不是大硬傷,,將自己的語句做到盡量不犯錯誤才是不丟分的關鍵。大多數(shù)同學都很希望自己的語句能表現(xiàn)力Max,,更有亮點,,但是在很多時候,我們一貫的寫作習慣其實已經(jīng)將自己的文章拉低了很多檔次,,接下來可以來看看幾組比較典型的“很難被發(fā)現(xiàn)”的表達易犯毛病,。
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想要寫一篇好的文章就需要具體到摳細節(jié),在細節(jié)方面我們又該注意什么呢,?話不多說,,直接上例子:
On the one hand, some people believe that playing Olympic games(不是play games,參加比賽跟舉辦比賽不是一個意思,所以不要寫錯了,寫錯了會算偏題)can cost the funds of government.(表達不夠 native,可以改為 some individu-als reckon that government would spend a wealth of money to hold the Olympic games). For example, when the country need(needs) to host a large sport com-petition, it would build some sport facilities to contain a large number of people from all of the world (around the world). It also need(needs to)employ some workers to manage the transport and regulate the rules when companions are playing, which will cost a lot of salaries( salary表示工資,用在這里不好,可以就用 money)
假如沒有特別指出來,相信大家還不會發(fā)現(xiàn),,平時的一些表達習慣和用詞習慣一段話就都體現(xiàn)得淋漓盡致,,有些錯誤還很難發(fā)現(xiàn),比如最末尾的用詞money,。
再來看一個例子:
Those who believe that robots could lead to detrimental effects on society have their solidseasons(reasons). One of the main issues is that the workplace which once need dozens upon dozens of human workers would disappear(工作場地會消失嗎?消失的不是工作場地,而應該是很多工作會由機器人去做吧) as robots that could work efficiently would replace human beings, thus resulting in unemployment and more pressure of job-hunters. Besides, as technology develops, some high-tech robots might one day have their own awareness; therefore, the product which is created by humans is likely to in turn control people and pose a threat to the society.(這兩個句子的因果關系讀不出來,機器人有意識為什么結果是人類自己創(chuàng)造的產(chǎn)品會控制人們,。中間的邏輯鏈差了一步 why) however, as the creators of robots, humans are able to maximize robots' advantages and to avoid the situation described above.
從這個案例可以看到同樣是犯了一個蠻嚴重的錯誤,就是邏輯關系表達的時候沒有理清楚,,假設在考場上的話是非常致命的,。然而類似機器人與人類的關系這樣的話題很多,邏輯關系有時候也很難理清,,這就需要我們不斷去完善,、思考。一個小細節(jié)就有可能決定了我們的寫作方向,,萬一跑題了,,后面就可想而知了。
細節(jié)決定成敗,,我們今天說到的都是一些平時備考寫作時很難被發(fā)現(xiàn)的問題,,所以說寫作一定要多修改,多總結,,才可以越來越好,,質量越來越高!
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